Draft #2 9/21/11

     Nature has many extreme living things. I think the most extreme is the Fish. This is because of many reasons. One reason it is extreme is that it has tremendous speed. Also, it has a really cool skin because they can feel vibrations.. Finally I think it is extreme because they sometimes lives far away from us.The Fish is an extreme living thing because they are so hard to catch and I like that!!!!! Just yesterday I caught a fish!!!!Another reason the Fish  is an extreme living thing is because if you try to catch them since they are fast you cant catch them.Finally, the fish is an extreme living thing because they  are a really colorful animal .they can swim so fast because of there strong tail. The other day i saw a fish on the beach.That is why I think fish is an extreme animal.

Draft #1 9/21/11

     Nature has many extreme living things. I think the most extreme is the Fish. This is because of many reasons. One reason it is extreme is that it has tremendous speed. Also, it has a really cool skin because they can feel vibrations.. Finally I think it is extreme because they sometimes lives far away from us.The Fish is an extreme living thing because they are so hard to catch and I like that!!!!! Just yesterday I caught a fish!!!!Another reason the Fish  is an extreme living thing is because if you try to catch them since they are fast you cant catch them.Finally, the fish is an extreme living thing because they  are a really colorful animal .they can swim so fast because of there strong tail. The other day i saw a fish on the beach.That is why I think fish is an extreme animal.

Draft #2 9/21/11

Nature has many extreme living things. I think the most extreme is the Fish. This is because of many reasons. One reason it is extreme is that it has tremendous speed. Also, it has a really cool skin because they can feel vibrations.. Finally I think it is extreme because they sometimes lives far away from us.The Fish is an extreme living thing because they are so hard to catch and I like that!!!!! Just yesterday I caught a fish!!!!Another reason the Fish  is an extreme living thing is because if you try to catch them since they are fast you cant catch them.Finally, the fish is an extreme living thing because they  are a really colorful animal .they can swim so fast because of there strong tail. The other day i saw a fish on the beach.That is why I think fish is an extreme animal.

Draft 2 Cars 9/14/11

     Cars can go really fast.They can go so fast that sometimes you can turn so sharp you could fly of the road!!!!!!!!!!!!   They can get you to your grandmas house so speedy. But, if your grandmas house is so far away like 300 miles, you could get there in 3 hours. Cars can also last way longer than skateboards.                                       

Draft 1 Cars

     Cars can go really fast.They can go so fast that sometimes you can turn so sharp you could fly of the road!!!!!!!!!!!!   They can get you to your grandmas house so fast. But, if your grandmas house is so far away like 300 miles you could get there in 3 hours. Cars can also last way longer than skateboards.                                         
 

story draft 2

  One horrible day at camp green lake.

         
          One hot morning at Camp Green Lake a girl named Julia woke up and went to the faucet to

Fill her canteen up with water. "Hi said"Sarah Kate"  
     Hello" said Julia. Sarah Kate & Julia were best friends they met each other on the first day of
camp. The next time that they dug holes Sarah Kate dug Julia's hole because Sarah Kate loved to dig holes. 
     Then the next day Sarah Kate got caught digging Julia's hole so the counselor got taken to the hospital because some dirt flew in his eyeball. When he got to the hospital he saw a person with snake venom nail polish! She was also so cute but really mean so,the counselor went to her and said "will you be my girl friend?"The women did absoulutly nothing and that freaked out at the counselor and then the women slapped the counselor and then the counselor started hurting because it was snake venom.

My story

   One horrible day at camp green lake.

         
          One hot morning at Camp Green Lake a girl named Julia woke up and went to the foset to

fill her cantin up with water. "Hi said"Sarah Kate"
"hello" said Julia. Sarah Kate & Julia were best friends they met each other on the first day of
camp. The next time that they dug holes Sarah Kate dug Julia's hole because Sarah Kate loved to dig holes. Then the next day Sarah Kate got caught digging Julia's hole so the counselor got taken to the hospital because some dirt flew in his eyeball.